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A post from Alfred; Jogja English Got Talent, The Kaleidoscope 2014

13 Jan

IMG_20150113_122209Jogja English Performance (EPS) is one of the Jogja English programs where the members of it can contribute to show their skill/performance to the others members in monthly event.

One of the events that have happened was “Kaleidoscope 2014” which the members of Jogja English both Home English (Female and Male) and classes program (Global Evening and Auto Global) in Jogja English showed their performances in a stage. The topic was whatever happened in 2014. Each group showed the performance in different way such as from Female Home which got as the favorite team, they showed drama about Ada ApaDenganCinta (AADC) film which was trending in 2014, they showed the plot of the film, the other performance came from Home EnglishManggis which got the first position from the official judgeshehehe, they showed about the best event in 2014 that was World Cup 2014, the event was happening while final match between Germany versus Argentina, in this cased both of teams got the winner because the referee’s decided.

I thought this event can prove each group that how made a teamwork, beside that this event be able to entertain another groups to make a lot of fun and be able to find more friends from another groups.

Thanks for the committees that held the EPS event, I think this event can stimulate the members more creative, organized-oriented, open-minded and make the others feel happy. That’s all what I got when I attended the Kaleidoscope EPS. Thank you and God always be with you.

 

Written by; Alfred S. (Male Home member)

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Posted by on January 13, 2015 in English, fun, stories

 

One response to “A post from Alfred; Jogja English Got Talent, The Kaleidoscope 2014

  1. rangga fahrian

    January 14, 2015 at 12:57 pm

    Great writing, Alfred. It looks better than before. But here are some corrections from me:
    1. In the 1st paragraph, “…to show their skill to the others members…”, should be, “…to show their skill to the other members”. You put double “S” (others and members) which is the correct is the “s” should be in the noun only. You can say “others” if it is not followed by a noun.
    2. You should use good punctuation to connect each sentence. It is like in paragraph two, “…they showed the plot of the film, the other performance came from…”. You should separate this sentence into two, so it becomes, “…they showed the plot of the film. The other performance came from…”
    3. “I thought this event can prove each group that how made a teamwork, beside that…”, should be, “I thought this event can prove each group how to make a teamwork (to work in a team),besides, …”. Word “how” is usually followed by to+infinitive. While the conjunction you used “beside that” is not known as conjunction in English. The conjunction which means “selain itu” is “Besides” only, without “that”.
    4. “another groups” should be “other groups”. “Another” is for singular noun and “other” is for plural noun.
    5. “…can stimulate the members more creative…”, should be, “…can stimulate the members to be more creative…”

     

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